初中英语作文最常见的扣分点之一：整篇文章像在念流水账——“First… Then… Next… Finally…”，读起来就是一个清单，不是一篇文章。
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问题在哪里
看这段学生原文：
I woke up at 7 o’clock. Then I had breakfast. Then I went to school. Then I had classes. Then I went home. Then I did homework. Then I went to bed.
这不能叫文章，这是日程表。
解决方案：按功能分类学过渡词
1. 时间顺序（代替 Then）
| 场景 | 用这个 | 不要再用 |
|---|---|---|
| 做完A接着做B | After that, / Following that, | And then |
| A的同时B发生 | Meanwhile, / At the same time, | At this time |
| A之后很久才做B | Eventually, / In the end, | Finally |
| 表示突然变化 | Suddenly, / All of a sudden, | Then |
2. 追加信息（代替 And）
- Besides, / What’s more, / Moreover, / In addition,
- Not only… but also…
示例：
I helped my mom wash the dishes. Besides, I also cleaned my room.
3. 转折对比（代替 But）
- However, / On the other hand, / Instead,
- Although + 句子
示例：
I wanted to go out and play. However, I still had homework to finish.
4. 因果关系（代替 So）
- Therefore, / As a result, / Because of this,
- This is why…
示例：
I practiced English every day. As a result, my grades improved significantly.
5. 举例说明
- For example, / For instance,
- Such as / Like
示例：
I enjoy outdoor activities, such as hiking and cycling.
一篇示范
题目：An Unforgettable Day
Last Saturday was an unforgettable day for me. In the morning, our family went hiking in the nearby mountain. While we were climbing, I suddenly noticed a beautiful view of the whole city from the top.
After that, we had a picnic by the lake. What’s more, my dad taught me how to fish. Although I didn’t catch any fish, I enjoyed the experience very much.
In the afternoon, it started raining unexpectedly. However, instead of going home, we found a small pavilion and played chess together.
This experience taught me that sometimes the best moments come from unexpected situations.
数一下：这段短文用了7种不同的过渡词，没有重复用”then”或”but”。
初中生最容易记住的8个高级过渡词
为了记起来方便，就记这8个：
- However — 然而（代替but）
- Therefore — 因此（代替so）
- Moreover / Furthermore — 而且（代替and）
- Meanwhile — 与此同时
- Eventually — 最终（代替finally）
- In addition — 除此之外
- As a result — 结果是
- For instance — 例如
每次写作文，要求自己至少从这8个里用4个。用熟了以后，这些词就变成你自然表达的一部分了。
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